This is fairly good minimalistic music. It reminds me of what I might hear if Phillip Glass or Steve Reich started using midi files to compose. I think the choice of bass drum really helped to cover the attack flaws of the guitar sample. Well done.
While this may not be my normal style of music, I can definitely appreciate that it works well for its purpose. It makes me want to get up and dance.
This is a very good start. While the basic outline you have created can act as a backdrop for these scenes, if you would like to truly portray the story in your music, I would recommend adding to your composition. For example, a battle is supposed to be taking place, yet I did not hear a single gunshot in your music; there is supposed to be shouting and chaos at points, however the music remained soft in dynamic and relatively smooth in character; also, I could not hear a difference between the various environments that the crew was supposed to be placed in. Essentially, while you captured the moods quite well overall, I do not think that you painted a clear picture with your music. This would be like looking through wax paper at a landscape and having to require someone to tell you that there is a tree five feet in front of you: you may know you are in a relaxing, beautiful environment, but you know nothing about it.
Hey man first off I want to say thanks for the actual review, it's nice to see a different opinion than previous.
I agree with you completely, if I truly wanted to make an audio representation of what was happening, I'd definitely add many of the things you stated there, such as sound effects and all but unfortunately most of the songs I make are made in a day or two, in my spare time (not that that's an excuse for quality).
You are right however, there's no way of knowing the story whatsoever without my explanation below. Thanks again for your input
This piece is very well composed. I love the calming instruments and folk-like melodies. The reason I took half a star away is because this piece could be better categorized. You could argue that this piece is minimalistic, programatic, or a chaccone and thus falls within the classical category: however, I find that this work fits better into the form of a modern song. While I have heard similar tracks from bands like Nightwish and Within Temptation, this piece seems to stand out in its relaxing, soft undertones. Well done.
Thanks for the in depth review man, and you're right, I was hesitant on putting it under classical myself, I almost put it into videogame because videogames can have just about any genre, anyways, thanks for the kind words!
As it stands, I feel like this song, without any words, is incomplete. However, this feels like the kind of track a producer would lay down to accompany some truly powerful rap lyrics. Well done.
Thanks for the feedback.
I'm happy for somebody to lay some vocals over the top of this track if they want to, but I'm not sure how well the flow of the beat will work with rapping.
This piece seems almost as though you had two clear, distinct styles that you tried to interject together. I heard elements of electronic atonality similar to what you might find in a piece by Stockhausen and sharply contrasting, almost "pop" sounding melodic sections. Unfortunately, while these two things may work on their own, I do not think that this piece managed to convince me that they work well together. I really liked the dark, atonal sections, but when the strong rhythmic pulse came in at about 1:05 and later when you introduced melodies, I felt that the piece slightly lost its impact. I would suggest rewriting this work into two separate pieces as both of those moods work well on their own but act give harshly contrasting connotations when put together in such a way as this piece presents.
hey rluebbert, thanks for the feedback, really appreciate it. Maybe I could make two complete songs out of this one, will give it a try! also, I need to check out stockhausen.
There is a lot that this piece has going for it: the colors are very interesting, the blend is nice, and the variety in the different sections is highly appreciated. That being said, my primary criticism of this work is that nothing really stood out to me as a melody or focal point. There was a lot going on, and I could actually see you using this track in its exact form as the background to a main melody (vocals, strings, or something that has a smooth, solid tone color to differentiate itself from the highly colorful background would be preferred)
I was thinking of adding vocals actually! I just dont really know where to start because I can't sing. Ill hold onto it for now but if an opportunity ever comes up I'll try to get some vocals on this. Thanks for the review!
I completely agree with OZeros, this piece is off to a very good start. The melody is sound and it is heading in a very good direction. However, in a dance piece like this, it is nice for the listener to have a variety of colors to listen to (after all, that is the primary merit to this type of music). The colors of various synthesizers can work together like an orchestra to transform a piece like this into an amazing canvas of art. I would recommend also making use of octaves, while this piece does have a catchy melody, it grows stale hearing an exact repetition this many times. With octaves, you can transpose either the whole melody or a part and get an entirely different effect. Lastly, as OZeros mentioned, this piece would be great with additional percussion. If you are going for a laid back feel, which this piece seems to have currently, I would recommend a soft bass drum, hand drums, smooth rides, and overtone instruments such as the triangle or finger cymbals.
This was a very good experiment. One thing to consider: according to your tags this is supposed to be a calm, relaxing piece, and yet there are quite a few things that detract from this mood.
1) The highly staccato nature of this piece combined with the four on the floor bass drum creates a tension that desires movement. This is okay in small bursts in a relaxing piece so long as that tension is released, otherwise there will be no chance to relax.
2) In the intro you created a high amount of tension with the bass line motif F-G#-A-G#-F. This is because the second G#, which acts as a secondary leading tone going to A, does not resolve.
3) Going off of #2, there is very little resolution in this piece. This means that you introduce clusters of notes or notes that do not belong in a chord, but you do not allow them to release the tension by resolving.
All of these things said, if you had intended to create a piece that was meant to create an offsetting atmosphere rather than a relaxing one, you did a good job. However, your tags lead me to suspect otherwise.
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